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You've Got to Hold on Tight!

Wow. My orcs-in-a-refugee-camp-run-by-elves story is gettin' mighty heavy pushback. I've never had anything rejected so quickly. Even the how-pathetic-would-it-really-be-to-be-a-modern-day-werewolf-preyed-on-by-a-quack-psychologist story didn't get this bad reception.

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asakiyume
May. 31st, 2012 01:35 am (UTC)
Wait a sec, though: the last people said it made them laugh, right? Or was that a different story?

(See, I read your last entry, it's just that I've been under the gun with work -_-)

barry_king
May. 31st, 2012 01:40 am (UTC)
Me, too. Very bad workload right now. But that doesn't stop those pesky editors from tossing my things back at me!

No, the one that got a chuckle was the one that I actually thought of a month or so ago after saying something to you about guns and small government on moon_custafer's LJ. I don't think you've seen it.
asakiyume
May. 31st, 2012 01:44 am (UTC)
Yeah, I guess it would be odd for an editor's one remark on the orc story to be that it made them laugh. I mean, the ending *sort* of made me laugh, but if we're talking All The Feelings, there were other feelings that stood out more.
barry_king
May. 31st, 2012 01:49 am (UTC)
I've been thinking about people being treated like garbage. Literally, as in being left out of sight out of town in a huge stinking pit. A little like the native encampment in Brave New World where the protagonist's mother gets accidentally lost.

But that's not a story is it? People want a laugh, don't they? They don't want to be reminded about landfills. Or where your poop goes when you flush.
asakiyume
May. 31st, 2012 01:53 am (UTC)
I was thinking similar thoughts--or well, along similar paths? I was imagining a world in which supposed criminals were punished by having their organs removed and given to "more deserving" sorts. Can't you practically see that now? The people who are driven to desperation then being offered up, bodily, to those who already have so much?

I was imagining you could have a death sentence, which would be to have all your vital organs removed, or you could have a half-death sentence, which would be to have one of each of your double organs removed: one eye, one lung, one kidney, one ovary or testicle. And then, you'd spend the rest of your days in involuntary servitude to pay back the fees for the operation.

... But like you, I didn't have a plot, just the scenario.
barry_king
May. 31st, 2012 02:44 am (UTC)
Hmm... kind of like the handmaid's tale, but not just borrowing someone else's fertility.

But as the general idea of using organ removal as a punishment, I recall that used that in episode one of the Lexx. Plot was, though, that a super-insect-god was eating all the bits of people that had been removed.

Not that I'd recommend the Lexx, unless you're keen on some industrial-strength cheese.
asakiyume
May. 31st, 2012 02:49 am (UTC)
Haha, well, seeing as I loathe The Handmaid's Tale, maybe this is a sign I can let unplotted story scenarios lie--at least in this case. Especially seeing as it's been done before. Seriously, thanks for the heads up! (I had a feeling it was kind of over the top)
asakiyume
May. 31st, 2012 01:37 am (UTC)
Here, take a listen to a song I heard for the first time an hour ago.
barry_king
May. 31st, 2012 01:46 am (UTC)
Oo. I like that a lot. It's like making thoughts by shuffling words.

"Like the picture of the forest in the fire in the hall"

Gives me shiver, that one does!
asakiyume
May. 31st, 2012 01:50 am (UTC)
I think some of the most stimulating thoughts come from shuffling words.

I liked The first was a flower and the second was a train
The first issued warning and the second brought the rain


... I think because I like trains, warnings, and rain, and I'm rather partial to flowers, if it comes to that.
barry_king
May. 31st, 2012 01:52 am (UTC)
It's reminding me of nursery rhymes, and similar songs like "leatherwinged bat".

Speaking of which, I'd love to do something with "one in rags, one in tags, and one in a velvet gown," but nothing's struck me yet.
asakiyume
May. 31st, 2012 01:55 am (UTC)
one in rags, one in tags, and one in a velvet gown
Yeah, some nursery rhymes are amazingly evocative!

I like

The man of the wilderness asked of me
How many strawberries grow in the sea
I answered him as best I could
As many red herrings as grow in the wood
barry_king
May. 31st, 2012 01:59 am (UTC)
Re: one in rags, one in tags, and one in a velvet gown
That's charming. I've never heard that one before.
peadarog
May. 31st, 2012 10:35 am (UTC)
I like the idea of that story. Reminded me a little of The Iron Dragon's Daughter. Sort of.
barry_king
May. 31st, 2012 11:02 am (UTC)
The werewolf one, then? Probably better in conception than execution. I wrote it while taking care of a copiously ill canine. Bodily fluids were involved.
peadarog
May. 31st, 2012 11:04 am (UTC)
Sorry, no. I meant the Orcs in the refugee camp. Oops.
barry_king
May. 31st, 2012 11:10 am (UTC)
Oh, yes. That's a touchy one. I think I'm being a little too clever with that one. I'm using the underlying racism in Tolkien's elf-orc dichotomy to show how racism drives situations like Gaza, Goma, Dadaab, and the Warsaw Ghetto to extremes. Sort of borrowing from his times to say something about how human warehousing is unsustainable at best and criminal at worst.
peadarog
May. 31st, 2012 12:03 pm (UTC)
It sounds exactly the way I want it to sound :)
barry_king
May. 31st, 2012 12:19 pm (UTC)
Speaking of which... I'd love to hear the sound of some Fairy Gold. Can you spare a copy?
peadarog
May. 31st, 2012 12:20 pm (UTC)
We could do a handy swap. Check your LiveJournal in box in a moment for further instructions.
barry_king
May. 31st, 2012 12:22 pm (UTC)
There's a joke in here somewhere about fairy gold turning into leaves, but I don't have the withal to make it.
peadarog
May. 31st, 2012 12:24 pm (UTC)
It's when you wake up and find it has turned to diarrhea that you need to worry.
bondo_ba
May. 31st, 2012 03:43 pm (UTC)
LOL. The sad thing is that both sound like exactly the kind of stuff I'l like to read. My Neurotic Vampire Who is Afraid of Grapefruit story went out again just yesterday...
barry_king
Jun. 1st, 2012 01:06 am (UTC)
So, I have to ask... why grapefruit? Are you open to sharing?
bondo_ba
Jun. 1st, 2012 12:44 pm (UTC)
Well, the scene started with a vampire having breakfast, and just kind of flowed naturally from there!
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